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    dots Submission Name: Conceited Peachdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Another succulent cherry kiss
    Another heady night
    Spent in the plight
    Of its imaginary sex

    Another wishful kiss
    On the banter of your dreams
    Another inch
    Just one more inch
    Of desperations worship

    Another broken promise
    Another photograph
    Another weeping poem
    Filled with the seas and shooting stars

    Banging on the breakwater
    The storms inside your heart

    Not forgotten in the winds
    But broken by your fingertips

    Conceited peach you dribble lush
    The heat into my head
    You’re taste so sweet
    But nothing you ever had

    Just an auburn promise of a dream
    With no courage to the “have”
    You look inside yourself
    And see the chill
    Then paint the words upon a broken heart

    Conceited peach you turn and rip inside my vein
    A year has passed
    And nothing has ever changed
    Still you slip inside your dream
    And you fall into your world

    And each and every one of you cling
    To what you think you have
    And security means
    So much more to you
    Than love









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