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do you wonder?

Author: blackdemigod13
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do you wonder?

hiding in the back where no one can see,
wishing that you could see the real me.
do you know i sit here day after day?
do you wonder why i don't say a word?
its because everytime i see you i can't breath,
wishing you would stay instead of leave.
i love you but you will never know,
so don't be suprised when you leave if i go.

Submitted on 2010-02-19 11:26:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "do you know I sit here day after say?" Is that right or do you mean day after day? Just trying to help.
| Posted on 2010-02-19 00:00:00 | by thingstoforget | [ Reply to This ]
  i thimk there need to be morre to it becuse i like it very mush but it remind me if a kid
| Posted on 2010-02-19 00:00:00 | by angelagresham19 | [ Reply to This ]

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