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    dots Submission Name: do you wonder?dots

    Author: blackdemigod13
    Elite Ratio:    1.52 - 56/60/41
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsdo you wonder?dots

    hiding in the back where no one can see,
    wishing that you could see the real me.
    do you know i sit here day after day?
    do you wonder why i don't say a word?
    its because everytime i see you i can't breath,
    wishing you would stay instead of leave.
    i love you but you will never know,
    so don't be suprised when you leave if i go.

    Submitted on 2010-02-19 11:26:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "do you know I sit here day after say?" Is that right or do you mean day after day? Just trying to help.
    | Posted on 2010-02-19 00:00:00 | by thingstoforget | [ Reply to This ]
      i thimk there need to be morre to it becuse i like it very mush but it remind me if a kid
    | Posted on 2010-02-19 00:00:00 | by angelagresham19 | [ Reply to This ]

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