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    dots Submission Name: The Nightdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsThe Nightdots
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    I told you that it was over boy
    I even showed you Iím overjoyed
    Twitted what I had to say
    Now to move on to another day
    Deleted your Myspace and all
    Click ignore every time you call
    Itís time to go out partying
    A new single life Iím living
    I canít remember when I was free
    Cause I always had you next to me
    Looked like were attached at the hip
    Iím glad this is finally over with

    And than comes the night
    And than comes the night
    When I start crying
    And wishing you held me tight

    And than comes the night
    And than comes the night
    When I start dying
    And wishing you shine youíre light




    Submitted on 2010-02-19 13:03:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Sounds like you enjoy being single yet you still want someone with you in the night it was pretty good some parts vere a little rough but it was a good.
    | Posted on 2010-02-24 00:00:00 | by cyberpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      You're "The Night" sad T-T (yet good.) I can see you've been in pain before. I hope you find a new shinning light soon.
    (P.S. It was good. (I say it again cuz it's ture:))
    | Posted on 2010-02-21 00:00:00 | by Snowtear | [ Reply to This ]


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