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    dots Submission Name: Flawlessdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    Hope eats out his heart
    A sweetness of divine cancer
    As he holds tight to the dream
    Another life
    It never happens
    Though he sits drinking
    Wishing
    This one last burning mouthful
    Would take the pain away

    She dreams
    Mostly in silence
    When waking up sweating
    Was that the baby crying
    Was someone speaking
    Did someone see her
    She lay out her broken heart
    The old clothes
    A skin she always has to wear

    In an incommunicado
    The nonentity
    Holds a weeping moment to its breast
    Cinders of the lost
    To ponder the aching hours as they pass
    As they hit the walls
    And scream with silent mouths

    He wakes from his own solitary comfort night
    To rewind the tourniquet
    As she disappears into the twist
    Hiding her tears behind her palms
    And time passes in its monotony
    The momentum of easily practical distance

    This is the world
    With its ease
    While the rest of the world
    Is searching for love
    Looking into its own special mirror
    Just to see what its worthy of

    For all the strangeness lays in hope
    A curious thing
    To be should be
    To hope
    Inside you

    Strangest thing to be
    And still have to
    Dream






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