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    dots Submission Name: Critics are Artless Soulsdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsCritics are Artless Soulsdots

    The false flak and shell bursts
    You hope so much
    Would make some sense
    Of opinions formulated
    But an educated lack of depth

    So knowledgeable
    Clever; if you wish to appear
    In a pseudo conglomeration of thought
    And impress your own indoctrination

    To the sit back
    Take that
    And roll a flaccid little ego
    Into its self pat on the back
    Sneer and ride your own little cart
    While you are pulled along by the horse

    It may please you to scathe; for a while
    And attention seeking may be acquiesced
    And appeased by its own mud slinging
    You may appear; more unique
    Than the people you are trying to impress

    But work out wonder
    As the penny drops
    As you sit with your own piffle
    Working out words
    Did you ever get the point
    While you spent so much time
    Repeating and regurgitating everything you had learnt

    With not one spec or iota of original thought

    Leave them alone
    Save them from your mindless piffle
    Leave the poets who hearts
    Hang in a moment of the spiritual

    Stop feeding yourself off them

    And try, just try to match them

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