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    dots Submission Name: High School Romancedots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHigh School Romancedots
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    It was as furious,
    as the girls in feathers.
    And as fleeting as a kiss,
    Under the summer moon's shine,
    And star's sleepy watch,
    You disapeared from this.

    In a heated debate,
    and shallow wave of your hand,
    It was over, and gone.
    By love-note fire,
    I declared you a liar,

    And I turned away from it all.




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