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    dots Submission Name: From Brian With Lovedots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 382
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 584



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       poetry about my baby hehehehehe, came to me one night while i was sleeping lol


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    dotsFrom Brian With Lovedots
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    You are my heartbeat that's pounding in my chest,
    You are the blood running through my veins.

    You are the thoughts that's keeping me up at nights,
    You are the light shining oh so bright.

    You are the will that makes me feel I can go on,
    You are the fight that keeps me standing strong.

    You are the love which amazes me everyday,
    And the hope which guides me on my way.

    You are the future in which I know I will be,
    Cuz you are everything and I always did believed.





    Submitted on 2010-02-21 04:56:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Its incredibly beautiful... it is a fearless song in a dangerous jungle resonating ... reverberating.

    GOOOOOD!!!!
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      For the last line, take out "did" and you'll have it perfectly. Good job on it!
    | Posted on 2010-02-21 00:00:00 | by Kitkara | [ Reply to This ]


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