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    dots Submission Name: Love medots
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    Author: Kitkara
    ASL Info:    19, Female, and in MO
    Elite Ratio:    6.63 - 25/25/15
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 798
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 442



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       I don't know... I felt like writing something. ^.^ I <3 my bf.


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    dotsLove medots
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    Touch me
    Hold me
    keep me, I'm yours.

    Save me
    Help me
    Protect me, I'm yours.

    Love me
    Kiss me
    taste me, I'm yours.

    I will always be yours, forever.

    So love me
    Think of me
    Dream of me.

    For in my own mind, you're mine.
    And I have not stopped thinking of you yet.

    Love me...




    Submitted on 2010-02-21 12:49:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is pure
    (like the driven snow)
    and that is a nice quality.

    imagine it as a snowflake,
    which is much like the whorl of a fingerprint,
    they say no two are alike.

    how could you make this one undeniable one?

    again, i would say that you have the seeds of the right stuff.

    this poem could be soft soft, as soft as it could be wild wild and wildly sensual, and i like the thought it could be both.

    as a starter...

    Touch me
    Hold me,
    (down) I'm yours.


    ....

    and i'd say that because this is pretty stock standard issue as far as the format goes, you need to be a little creative like that to give it life beyond its bones.
    | Posted on 2010-02-22 00:00:00 | by theAlysonDiarys | [ Reply to This ]
      Very simple poem indeed. I really liked the rhythm in these first 9 lines. I would liked the whole poem better when you had continued that rhythm. But other than that, it's lovely poem.
    | Posted on 2010-02-22 00:00:00 | by Lilyan | [ Reply to This ]
      this is interesting.
    i love the way you love. ehee.

    peace.

    :)
    | Posted on 2010-02-22 00:00:00 | by cedrickdada | [ Reply to This ]
      It's simple yet has alot of meaning. I kinda wanted to keep going though so maybe too short but that's probably what makes it good. All in all I like it
    | Posted on 2010-02-21 00:00:00 | by Hazel eyes Jess | [ Reply to This ]


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