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    dots Submission Name: sickdots
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    Author: blackdemigod13
    Elite Ratio:    1.52 - 56/60/41
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    head spinning and my stomach is in pain,
    but you know what they say no pain no gain
    all i want to do is sleep,
    and for everyone to shut up and not say a peep
    mom says ill be ok and just to chill,
    i have a fever so i have to take a motrin pill




    Submitted on 2010-02-21 16:04:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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