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Submission Name: sick dots

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Author:	blackdemigod13
Elite Ratio:	1.52 - 56/60/41
Words:	57

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	642
Average Vote:	4.0000
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sick

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head spinning and my stomach is in pain,
but you know what they say no pain no gain
all i want to do is sleep,
and for everyone to shut up and not say a peep
mom says ill be ok and just to chill,
i have a fever so i have to take a motrin pill

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