Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Peaceful Riverdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 22
    Class/Type: Prose/Happy
    Total Views: 789
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 155



    Description:
       River escape ~ American River on Hwy. 50 East to Tahoe.

    So relaxing!

    Love, Peace, Joy, Grace, Faith


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsPeaceful Riverdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Green, peaceful river
    of knowledge
    Let me float
    in your current
    take me along
    for a ride to sea
    of understanding




    Submitted on 2004-07-23 15:09:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      what a relaxing read! i enjoyed the casual and brief form, and the theme is one i can relate to-i love the water.

    'for a ride to sea
    of understanding'
    could this be a play on words?
    a ride to see understanding?
    nothing else to critique on this lovely piece-please forgive nitpicking. :)
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      I'd like a ride on that river too. The very essence of relaxation, in a very well done poem.
    Great job, this made me even feel relaxed as my mind was wept away in the slow moving current of you words.
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very relaxing. I was imaginging myself in that river whilst reading, and damn real life experience must be great.
    | Posted on 2004-07-29 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you should either ride along to THE sea of understanding, or since you are speaking to the river, to YOUR sea of understanding. Maybe I'm just a bit thick this AM though.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-07-24 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say, great imagery, it is relaxing and there's not much else to say so posting should be difficult. Nothing should be changed because the piece is too short for anything to go wrong really, but still. nice work.
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      nice...wish i could go along for the ride as well...eyes closed...breeze whispering over my face...my how you have relaxed me..very nice
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    18316

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    ME written by jjd
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Love and Solitaire written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Last to Walk the Earth written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In the end written by Janesaddiction
    On Loop written by Daniel Barlow
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    This written by Chelebel
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Dirge of Nostalgia written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    Watch them Die written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Commencement written by Ramneet
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Lunch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    Blood to Plowshares written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Born of the Mouth written by MyPeriodical
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Incubus written by monad
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Tides of Man written by HisNameIsNoMore
    A Fire! A Knife! A Black Crow Calls! written by HisNameIsNoMore

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry