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    dots Submission Name: Peaceful Riverdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 22
    Class/Type: Prose/Happy
    Total Views: 739
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 155



    Description:
       River escape ~ American River on Hwy. 50 East to Tahoe.

    So relaxing!

    Love, Peace, Joy, Grace, Faith


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    dotsPeaceful Riverdots
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    Green, peaceful river
    of knowledge
    Let me float
    in your current
    take me along
    for a ride to sea
    of understanding




    Submitted on 2004-07-23 15:09:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what a relaxing read! i enjoyed the casual and brief form, and the theme is one i can relate to-i love the water.

    'for a ride to sea
    of understanding'
    could this be a play on words?
    a ride to see understanding?
    nothing else to critique on this lovely piece-please forgive nitpicking. :)
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      I'd like a ride on that river too. The very essence of relaxation, in a very well done poem.
    Great job, this made me even feel relaxed as my mind was wept away in the slow moving current of you words.
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very relaxing. I was imaginging myself in that river whilst reading, and damn real life experience must be great.
    | Posted on 2004-07-29 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you should either ride along to THE sea of understanding, or since you are speaking to the river, to YOUR sea of understanding. Maybe I'm just a bit thick this AM though.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-07-24 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say, great imagery, it is relaxing and there's not much else to say so posting should be difficult. Nothing should be changed because the piece is too short for anything to go wrong really, but still. nice work.
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      nice...wish i could go along for the ride as well...eyes closed...breeze whispering over my face...my how you have relaxed me..very nice
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]


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