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    dots Submission Name: The Pearl Amongst Diamondsdots
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    Author: Swimming Bird
    ASL Info:    31/m/AR
    Elite Ratio:    5.36 - 92/90/27
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 916
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 760



    Description:
       This was actually part of a comment that I had made on someone else's write. Its short, I know, but it seemed like more than just a simple post. I wish i could speak with this much passion more often.


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    dotsThe Pearl Amongst Diamondsdots
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    "...a poor excuse, I know. But it helps me remember... and I need to remember... Sometimes there's so much beauty in the world I feel like I can't take it, like my heart's going to cave in." - American Beauty


    The moon.
    She smiles as she illuminates all that surrounds me.
    Everything bathing in her glory seems to glow.
    And in the dark recesses of my mind,
    She shines.
    A beacon of hope.
    That is where I find my beauty,
    Basking in her rays trying to soak them up.
    Hoping beyond all hope that she stays,
    So that I never forget.
    Everytime I see her,
    I smile to the point of tears.
    Her beauty cutting to the core.




    Submitted on 2010-02-22 11:36:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice one. Both diamonds & pearls are precious. But one offset by the sheer number of the others makes it stand out more. I love the value placements espoused by this poem. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      What caught me was the title, I love pearls.

    The quote at the top, doesn't quite fit in.
    I'd move that to the description.

    Very Nice, whoever she is is a lucky girl to have such pretty words written for her.

    Carrie:)
    | Posted on 2010-02-23 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]


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