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    dots Submission Name: A part of you.dots

    Author: lostampconfused
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 3/4/5
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       i have had a really bad night and needed to vent. i dont think i have to spell out to you who and what this is about. and yes i am a glutton for punishment. and the one person who can truely hurt me and i still keep trying.

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    dotsA part of you.dots

    Sometimes i wonder why i still try,
    with you.
    no matter how many times you,
    spit in my face,
    and turn me away....
    i tell you that i love you,
    and you tell me,
    that giving birth to me,
    is all your willing to admit to.
    i am nothing more,
    than an unwanted egg,
    too late for you to abort.
    even now as an adult,
    you still see nothing more
    in me.
    i feel so alone,
    even though,
    i have a family
    of my own now.
    i just want you to know
    that i love you.
    and that is something that will never change.
    till the end of time
    and indefinitely.
    i am hoping that someday you will see,
    me, and know
    that this is true.
    i am far from perfect,
    but all i want,
    is to be a part of you.
    that is all i have ever wanted.
    i spent my whole child hood
    knowing that i was never good enough
    for you to accept.
    so why am i still trying?

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      Deep, sounds personal, makes me wonder why they care. Some of the lines are really brief and throw it off slightly even with that I liked it personally. The parts that were to short were like the two words for the line. Yet it didn't totally take away from the peom.
    | Posted on 2010-02-24 00:00:00 | by cyberpoet | [ Reply to This ]

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