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    dots Submission Name: Your side of the beddots

    Author: lostampconfused
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 3/4/5
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsYour side of the beddots

    i cant sleep,
    and all i want to do
    is eat...
    and when i think about you
    that is even worse,
    all i want to do,
    is throw shit around.
    and imagine it's you.
    hoping for some solitude,
    from my thoughts of you.
    we might live in the same house
    and we are suppose to be sharing
    a bed....
    but you seem to like the couch...
    more than you like me.
    i hate waking up in the
    middle of the night alone.
    sometimes, i sneak
    out to where you are
    and sleep on the floor,
    next to the couch,
    just to be with you.
    i know that i kick,
    hit, and snore. but
    that isn't the reason
    you left our bed.
    i wish you would,
    leave the couch to
    get cold and come warm
    up your side of the bed.
    it gets cold at night and
    i sleep better knowing
    your there, with me.
    that is...
    it should be.

    Submitted on 2010-02-24 01:41:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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