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    dots Submission Name: A Girl and The Snowdots
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    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 778
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1004



    Description:
       A snowy night and a girl...it happens.


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    dotsA Girl and The Snowdots
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    Last night I saw what she spoke of...
    A lamp-post, a light, and falling snow.
    Falling lightly, slowly in small illumination
    With darkness around, and there
    Above my head a small window of simplicity
    Of a lamp-post and comforting dust.

    She saw falling snow and liked it.
    And I saw the small illumination and dust.
    We saw different perspectives of one reality;
    For I realized, she wasn't watching the lamp
    Nor the window of lit snow, but she was
    Watching the snow itself.

    There was no light behind it
    Say that of street ambiance,
    No direct beam of illumination,
    She simply saw the snow, and she smiled.

    She talks to me more often, and I to her
    Though we are of different perspectives;
    I hope to know her better-for friend or more.
    There is at least one connecting factor...

    We both find Beauty in comforting dust.





    Submitted on 2010-02-24 13:00:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like the image you gave here. I started reading it, and I was like, ok, good so far...

    But then when you compared your different views to different views of snow...I thought, magnificent!!!

    I LOVE this write.

    Truely magnificent.
    (I hope I spelt that right, haha)

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    -Kali.
    | Posted on 2010-02-24 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]


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