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    dots Submission Name: Songbirddots

    Author: Roselize
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 22/40/27
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 536
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 410


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    I had a songbird,
    Feathers bright,
    Its eyes as dark as doom,
    It's voice was filled with life and light,
    It sang away my pain, my fright,
    I watched it die the other night,
    Watched as it lost the will to fight,
    And feeling an insane delight,
    I smiled and left the room.

    (It still lies hidden, out of sight,
    Decaying in the gloom)

    Submitted on 2010-02-25 04:18:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      second "its," should be "its" same as first one--

    that out of the way...mmmm

    i wonder that this has no comments...this is an intriguing piece of poetry...

    yes, very dark...but maybe not so much

    i don't think the speaker is smiling because the bird is dead...i think the bird sang away the speaker's pain...maybe absorbed it in a way...and now the pain has died with the bird...

    the smile is the feeling of being free...no need for the sad songs anymore...

    just thoughts...but this leaves a lot to the imagination..it is short...but that is often better with poetry..don't give us too much..just enough to keep us pondering..and keep the interpretation open..

    like it

    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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