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Author: Roselize
Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 22 /40 /27
Words: 65
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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I had a songbird,
Feathers bright,
Its eyes as dark as doom,
It's voice was filled with life and light,
It sang away my pain, my fright,
I watched it die the other night,
Watched as it lost the will to fight,
And feeling an insane delight,
I smiled and left the room.

(It still lies hidden, out of sight,
Decaying in the gloom)

Submitted on 2010-02-25 04:18:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  second "its," should be "its" same as first one--

that out of the way...mmmm

i wonder that this has no comments...this is an intriguing piece of poetry...

yes, very dark...but maybe not so much

i don't think the speaker is smiling because the bird is dead...i think the bird sang away the speaker's pain...maybe absorbed it in a way...and now the pain has died with the bird...

the smile is the feeling of being need for the sad songs anymore...

just thoughts...but this leaves a lot to the is short...but that is often better with poetry..don't give us too much..just enough to keep us pondering..and keep the interpretation open..

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| Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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