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    dots Submission Name: How she makes me feel.dots
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    Author: cyberpoet
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 28/18/22
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsHow she makes me feel.dots
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    When I see her my heart starts racing my stomach full of butterflies. She looks at me with her beautiful eyes that sparkle in the light. My knees feel weak as she gets closer my heart races faster she puts her arms around me, and i put mine around her.
    She kisses me and I start to forget. The day goes right by like a blur its time to go I start to feel lost cause half of me is going with her. One last kiss.
    One last time to hold her tight.
    My last glimpse is the car slowly leaving my site. And there I am, immediatly missing her and lonely once again.




    Submitted on 2010-02-25 13:18:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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