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    dots Submission Name: Forget Me!dots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 762
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1001



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       I know the basics. No Flow, Poor Rhyme, Poor Punctuation.
    I understand criticism but every now and again a “Good Write” is nice!


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    dotsForget Me!dots
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    Do you know that it hurts me to talk to you?
    I tried my best to stay away from you, but you just can’t forget me.
    Every time you find me my stomach cringes.
    You know i loved you once, but now I just want to get away from you.
    I can’t be your bleeding heart every time you need one.
    You only want to be friends when it benefits you,
    But you never care to ask how it makes me feel.
    Once I wanted to be with you but now all I can do is hate you.
    I picked up the pieces where you left them and moved past "Us".
    I just wish you would do the same without me.
    And don’t worry about me because I’m fine and I won’t miss you.
    When you get where you’re going in life I hope you do well,
    I’m not as bitter as I want to be but you’re gone now and I’m HAPPY,
    And If I never see you again I wouldn’t mind.
    You hurt me so much and wasted so much time.
    So Goodbye you and have a wonderful life.




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