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    dots Submission Name: i'd be lying if i said i didnt love you (suggdots
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    Author: besodemuerte
    ASL Info:    31/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    5.83 - 242/253/27
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 741
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    Description:
       writing about a current situation in my life.... looking for name suggestions and all other criticisms :)


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    dotsi'd be lying if i said i didnt love you (suggdots
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    I don't mean to argue, I'm a little high strung.
    I can't hold my breath, I can't hold my tongue.
    The infuriating way I allow what I feel;
    to see what's not there and hope that it's real.
    Its sad I've rekindled this hope at all.
    Built up with logic, I had a strong wall.
    Til insecurities formed holes and my soul wandered through
    to escape from it's safety and wander towards you....

    It's hard when everything's falling apart,
    to accept your refusal of my now shattered heart.
    Do what you want with the pieces you find.
    A heart is a gift and i'll regrow mine.




    Submitted on 2010-02-26 03:32:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The power of Heart Regeneration that is kewl!
    I like falling in love poems more than I like break up
    pathos. However the smoothness of this one makes up a
    bit for the subject matter. And Heart Regeneration lets not forget that! That is about all I got I mean you say it all in the poem.
    So was your heart shattered by the same person that
    does not want you now? I mean that would make sense but it does not definitely say that.
    Then I guess one more thing unless you got one really
    cold heart as in frozen by liquid nitrogen your heart would most likely just splatter a big mess.
    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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