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    dots Submission Name: "I am"dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots"I am"dots
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    Many know me
    Very few know who I am; what I'm all about

    Doing my damest to live life to its fullest
    I am!
    Trying my hardest to find the good in ALL the bad
    I am!

    Needless to say I am struggling
    Fighting with

    Good VS Evil
    Subordinate VS Obedient

    The darkness consumes me for it knows my past life
    These scars I have caused myself remain
    no matter my please to Jesus himself
    My pains reminde me of my actions and soon my own demise

    Nevertheless I am doing all I can with what little life I may have left!




    Submitted on 2010-02-26 20:01:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one very much so Jackz.It seems that ur going thru the 2nd cycle of early adulthood which I really identify with because I feel as tho on both shoulders theres the demonic then theres the angelic like some internal war with the concern of wanting to be a good person as much as possible.Jackz it's a fav for me.I'll be 21 in Sept.Uve already crossed over to the point of transition.Your work is about to get better on the basis of you already going thru somethin that made you better as a writer.Somehow I find out that my peers have the same [censored] goin on kinda.I got somethin for u to read I gotta finish it wit cherries on top.It's called "Best Friend to a martian". keep up the greatness. *Salutes*
    | Posted on 2010-07-08 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one very much so Jackz.It seems that ur going thru the 2nd cycle of early adulthood which I really identify with because I feel as tho on both shoulders theres the demonic then theres the angelic like some internal war with the concern of wanting to be a good person as much as possible.Jackz it's a fav for me.I'll be 21 in Sept.Uve already crossed over to the point of transition.Your work is about to get better on the basis of you already going thru somethin that made you better as a writer.Somehow I find out that my peers have the same [censored] goin on kinda.I got somethin for u to read I gotta finish it wit cherries on top.It's called "Best Friend to a martian". keep up the greatness. *Salutes*
    | Posted on 2010-07-08 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one very much so Jackz.It seems that ur going thru the 2nd cycle of early adulthood which I really identify with because I feel as tho on both shoulders theres the demonic then theres the angelic like some internal war with the concern of wanting to be a good person as much as possible.Jackz it's a fav for me.I'll be 21 in Sept.Uve already crossed over to the point of transition.Your work is about to get better on the basis of you already going thru somethin that made you better as a writer.Somehow I find out that my peers have the same [censored] goin on kinda.I got somethin for u to read I gotta finish it wit cherries on top.It's called "Best Friend to a martian". keep up the greatness. *Salutes*
    | Posted on 2010-07-08 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one very much so Jackz.It seems that ur going thru the 2nd cycle of early adulthood which I really identify with because I feel as tho on both shoulders theres the demonic then theres the angelic like some internal war with the concern of wanting to be a good person as much as possible.Jackz it's a fav for me.I'll be 21 in Sept.Uve already crossed over to the point of transition.Your work is about to get better on the basis of you already going thru somethin that made you better as a writer.Somehow I find out that my peers have the same [censored] goin on kinda.I got somethin for u to read I gotta finish it wit cherries on top.It's called "Best Friend to a martian". keep up the greatness. *Salutes*
    | Posted on 2010-07-08 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one very much so Jackz.It seems that ur going thru the 2nd cycle of early adulthood which I really identify with because I feel as tho on both shoulders theres the demonic then theres the angelic like some internal war with the concern of wanting to be a good person as much as possible.Jackz it's a fav for me.I'll be 21 in Sept.Uve already crossed over to the point of transition.Your work is about to get better on the basis of you already going thru somethin that made you better as a writer.Somehow I find out that my peers have the same [censored] goin on kinda.I got somethin for u to read I gotta finish it wit cherries on top.It's called "Best Friend to a martian". keep up the greatness. *Salutes*
    | Posted on 2010-07-08 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one very much so Jackz.It seems that ur going thru the 2nd cycle of early adulthood which I really identify with because I feel as tho on both shoulders theres the demonic then theres the angelic like some internal war with the concern of wanting to be a good person as much as possible.Jackz it's a fav for me.I'll be 21 in Sept.Uve already crossed over to the point of transition.Your work is about to get better on the basis of you already going thru somethin that made you better as a writer.Somehow I find out that my peers have the same [censored] goin on kinda.I got somethin for u to read I gotta finish it wit cherries on top.It's called "Best Friend to a martian". keep up the greatness. *Salutes*
    | Posted on 2010-07-08 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Jackz,

    I haven't been on this sight for months but when I left I remember how angry your poetry was. After reading this I get a different feeling, almost a sense of acceptance that you can't change the past and you can only control the future. I really enjoyed reading this.....not only because I enjoyed the writing but because I think that you have come sooooo far.

    Cheers,

    Will
    | Posted on 2010-03-14 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]


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