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    dots Submission Name: Same Differencedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 369
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSame Differencedots

    Child like enthusiasm it seems
    Is limited to children
    They can have their moments of exuberance
    All shinning eyes
    And wonder like smiles
    All of it laughing and accepting
    And donít care
    Canít a grip on
    But isnít it amazing !

    How the drops of sunlight just keep on coming

    They just keep on coming

    Three oíclock and youíre counting hours
    Postulating the sins
    Of being idle
    But there is no fun, no fun at all
    To lay back in the sun
    All the children have a whiplash in your heart
    Innocent squeals of laughter
    Bust the peace
    Your refined peace of mind
    Your mind as an adult

    And the day repeats
    Itís not sunny today
    Just sunny again
    Itís not raining today
    Just raining again
    And the miasma of the mediocre
    Is the mask you wear for the world

    Lay back in the sun listening to the children
    Can you remember when
    Those drops of sunlight just kept on coming

    They just keep on coming

    But they fall now
    On this two dimension flat plain of being
    Two dimensional flat plain of thinking
    And nothing has the substance
    It was initially endowed with

    Four oíclock and youíre counting hours

    Parsimonious in the discomfiture of spending them

    And while living your life is not lived at all
    The mind turns to another momentary thrill
    If that could fill this void
    The emptiness you feel inside your heart
    Then you would scavenge for every hedonistic congress

    But they donít
    And they canít
    And you wonder why the laughter of children
    Can seem so suddenly irksome
    As you fidget with your boredom

    Five oíclock and youíre counting hours
    Postulating your sins
    In the tickingís of idle
    But there is no fun, no fun at all
    Laying back in the sun
    All the children have a whiplash for your heart
    Those innocent squeaks of laughter
    Break that piece of your mind
    Your refined peace of mind
    Your mind you defined
    As an adult

    How the drops of sunlight just keep on coming
    They just keep on coming

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      I couldn't really tell wether you where deeply depressed or just poking fun at the apparent discontinuities of your emotional state . Hopefully the latter . I mean josh , I find my ability to think like an adult brings me more joy than youthful exuberance ever did . The drops of sunshine just keep on coming . Seriously have yourself a fornication of a homogeny exogamy . Don't forget your prophylaxis protocol . Be succinctly salacious with your obdurate feisty and you may find yourself ecstatically euphoric or mesmerically enraptured even . Good luck .
    | Posted on 2010-02-28 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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