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    dots Submission Name: Land of The Facadedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLand of The Facadedots
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    Promise you freedom
    Take away your liberty
    Promise you choice
    End up with slavery

    Promise you peace
    Ruled by the weapon
    Promise you truth
    But itís hidden by someone
    Promise you the freedom of speech
    And the assassinís gun

    Promise you happy comfortable lives
    So long as you, tow the line
    Promise you plenty
    Plenty of what ever you need
    But itís their fat, slack and bloated ball sack
    Which fucks you every time

    Promise you beauty
    And plastic surgery
    Promise you sexy
    And the phoney cosmetically
    Promise you health
    If you can pay the bill

    Promise you equality
    Oh and the Blacks and the Indians to
    Promise to save you
    If you are lost
    But these promises
    Have a cost

    Promise to rape you
    And your land
    Promise to use you
    For our own end

    Promise not to care
    Collateral damage and your children
    Promise to suck you dry
    Like any other parasite

    Promise to gloat
    In the well fed, fat, slack and bloated ball sack
    Of our lives
    And fuck you
    Every time






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