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    dots Submission Name: Blue Girlsdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsBlue Girlsdots
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    I can taste the very air of your deceit
    It lingers inside me
    Tarnish on my tongue
    With too many poems written
    Written in too many verses
    On the converse of love

    With a pallet of tin
    Sticks this cold tang of steal
    And at once was bitten too sweet
    And too real
    Did you dribble such a fragrance
    Of regret

    Empty words
    Empty promise
    Empty skies
    So replete with the poundings
    Their beaches and waves

    Echoes now, second best

    I would forget you
    If you did not hang so precariously on the harp
    If all the wisdom of ages
    Were to turn to dust
    I would not linger in the words of my heart

    Ah ! take a desperate sigh to the trash can
    Set fire to its malingering intent
    Wipe off this taint
    In what pleasures you take in this trickery
    Ha ! more fool me

    Sleep with your sorrow
    Sleep as I do
    Now there is no hope or dream to cling to
    Regurgitate all the love you allude to
    In empty lines
    And apathetic rhymes
    So they can match the death you brought me to

    And one by one all the castles
    All the blue girls
    All the purple poetry
    All the caged animal in me
    Sinks
    And dies within your quills and inks
    Of deceit




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