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    dots Submission Name: "You Forever"dots
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    Author: Loquacious Mind
    ASL Info:    24/M/North Carolina
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 289/309/98
    Words: 379
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 909
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3495



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    dots"You Forever"dots
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    I love everything
    about you like
    your glass fingertips
    such as how they
    so gently amble
    and meander
    equally dander
    pander and ponder
    wander in wonder
    as to why I never
    wander too far
    yonder beyond the
    longest minutes and
    even longer beyond
    the yonder Tomorrow's
    second Sun's revolutions
    sensual instances
    as evolutions dilute
    amidst shades of
    thick mellows
    cranberry devolutions
    sexual silks slip
    against lips as
    silt kisses past
    oceanic sediments
    of sedentary sentiment
    and as eyes eye eyes
    liquid scents of
    jasmine synthesized
    to absinthe align
    frozen seconds in time
    like incense smoke visions
    in mirrors with tints
    of blue light currents

    cyclic laments of
    past relationships
    failing their men
    when in your life
    present reflective
    essences bounce off
    columns of light beams
    tear tresses stress
    quintessant rifts
    in time recess
    specific pin-point
    doplar positions
    in mattress fibers
    with satellite accuracy
    areolas like the
    Ports of Portugal
    rising horticultured
    cortical arousal
    pleasured screams
    escape silence
    divine excitement
    under the whiles of
    desire enlightenment
    beautiful southern
    hummingbird dhalia
    of a moonlight autumn
    rustic atomic equinox
    draped beneath a cloak
    of antiquated twilight
    tucked under a
    conundrum of stars
    vernal offsets augment
    awnings of eyelids

    as thighs drip
    sub-atomic drops
    like sweat speech
    speaks restlessly velvet
    in a rhetoric dream
    metaphorical stanzas
    metamorph figurative
    grass blades
    upon literal plains
    physical crests
    breast necks backs
    breasts then undress
    latin syllables
    as tongues twist
    quench thirsts
    ephemeral facets
    aspects spiritual
    with emerald passion
    bashful abasement voxes
    voice chords coarse
    crescendos in code
    morphing vocal points
    contorting throats
    anointing notes
    with candlewick
    sex ointment innuendos
    oil joints intersections
    midpoints connecting
    divisions of midsections
    disconnecting skin flesh
    peels away like cellulose
    closed-quartered emotion
    caught on film

    clothes dim away
    light fades and
    candles imitate shadows
    emulate body fluidity
    breaths stop hovering
    atop reveries lingering
    in Heaven's afterglow
    slow flow motion
    pours vivid lividity
    intricacy eccentric
    concentrics eclectic
    electrics magnetic
    questions to stagnant
    answers prose poised poignant
    malignant poetical antigens
    manic-depressive fingers...

    ...because you see
    I love you to pieces
    in so many ways
    that this is just a

    [crash]

    memory dump
    of how much I truly...
    ...[insert] you,
    and only you...
    you'll always be my
    number 1 for Today
    but I'll always
    [insert] You
    Forever.




    Submitted on 2010-02-27 16:37:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Although I had trouble following your logistical induction I found the madcap nature of your abstract expression truly enlightening . All those quips and catchy phrases woven into an almost excruciatingly ecstatic tale of euphoria maned . I can understand how feeling this way makes one's thoughts a little bit disconnected . Its obvious to see you are truly infatuated . This stream of consciousness almost gets it for me . If thats actually possible on a sexual level . None the less throughly enjoyable .
    In case your wondering how I came by your site I got it from outlaw who left me a brashly scathing revue on one of my poems . To which I commented he should try "Jacks to open" . I'm new to ES and could like some feedback .
    | Posted on 2010-03-06 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay wow, let me remember to breathe...that was simply mind blowing. Like I said, I believe you have twisted my brain xD

    It just....slid right off the page! Like...god how do I explain this?

    Jesus. really Okay damn let me try and gather my thoughts.

    As always I'm a huge fan of your work, and I have been for years, though I am horribly biased by this point, I'm amazed. Gah, what can I say to this? Other than completely rave and sound like an utter lunatic ;_;

    Well in short. I love*/adore*/admire*/am amazed***/and absolutely am crazy over this piece

    (read further for sentence finishing)

    *it
    **about
    ***by it


    Anyway I'm probably confusing the living hell out of you

    I'm favoriting this >.>

    ~all my adoration~
    Nikki
    | Posted on 2010-02-27 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]


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