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    dots Submission Name: Rootclod Rudimentsdots
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    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    62/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 910/334/99
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Prose/Venting
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    Exotic trollwood harlotry and mule kit blues
    Tyrannical tyrannosaur traction padness
    Cohort cavorts clastic and witch's tit hues
    Ontological ontogeny somatology fadness
    Inductive endemic veracities and talus weather clues
    Epistemological equilibrium's homogeny badness
    Timeless rhetorical ruminations and ephemeral exigency dues
    Transcendent ascensional equivocal madness

    Tactile acuity prescience capacity intrepid intrigues
    Mystical symbiosis dharma sensorium sentiment proselyte
    Torturous tractive prosthesis umbrage ultraism colleagues
    Newfangled nocturnal nonchalant nether nestle neophyte
    Top notch topography tortoise trauma fatigues
    Faustian faux pas foist felicitous fealties socialite
    Agnate nous ontological ontogeny euphenics in league
    Mentalities evocative introjecting sycophant eulogizing apposite

    Mystical terrestrial equestrian tellurian tableau
    Panoramic imagery empiricist
    Evocative exserted apomixes' ethereal should show
    Ontological somatology lyricist
    Reflective refraction remissions opulence could know
    Theosophy Theophany epiphany equilibrist
    Magniloquent inductive extrapolation quantum back hoe
    Transcendent nimbus nimiety exorcist




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      Although I appreciate the open venture you pursue insofar as all of this mystical stuff goes, there lacks a certain content for it to signify much to me. You see, to say that we cannot shut ourselves off to the possibility can either imply two different things : that we are looking for it, or that we do not deny it. I feel like, and particularly in this poem, you are of the former category. Let me explain. I've never endorsed thoughts that debase the basic value of the body -- the corporeal clod as some say. You are turning your back to the very process that at times seems to define the universe -- and to posit the existence of much more beyond it is to turn your back even further on this realm we call reality. Why? I like Freud's concept of the "reality principle" as this thing which is the first force to impose itself upon the biological organism and is that against which that very organism strives for the rest of its existence. He called it a biological kind of elasticity; even here, however, I find a precept that enacts my dissatisfaction. Freud has to posit the existence of an initial nirvana, if you will, which explains the whole potential energy and elasticity bit.

    Are we really so propelled by pleasure, or what nietzsche calls power, that we cannot overcome it, even in overcoming it? And this escapist dream you have of a mystical departure: is it a sincere want, a genuine interest, or just another selfish pleasure-oriented gambit, a try to overcome reality. Why must reality be overcome, or transformed? Equilibrium isn't any better an attempt than a total upheaval, because it is the equivalent of a wall. The wall of non-communication. The cessation of reality communicative propriety and dominion over man's mind. Your mysticism is much more destructive than you might think. And people often overlook the individual nature of these pathways, and whether personal ambition or greed is to blame is hard to say. How can a monk truly climb to sagacity and leave his peers behind because they "do not understand" or "are not looking for the answer"? I could steal people's money because they "do not understand" or "are not looking to keep it".

    But those are just my personal gripes. Sorry I did not relate in the way you may have wished.

    Marc.
    | Posted on 2011-06-16 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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