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    dots Submission Name: Humbly Prouddots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHumbly Prouddots
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    Softly speak my name in your mind
    Do chills follow it down your spine?
    And you try to force the thoughts away
    But they creep back up every time

    The lingering of this ripple's wake
    Like echoes, it may seem to fade
    With every copy more mute and fake
    Then another skips onto that lake

    It's a vicious cycle, this, you know
    You would think you'd see every pulse
    But they always sneak in, row by row
    And try as you might, you can't let go

    Though is that even what you desire?
    Or grit your teeth through and through?
    And call that part of yourself a liar
    Solemn respect from playing with fire

    But pride and modesty seldom cross
    And time passes by without much change
    With it all you take and toss
    And try not to see this loss

    This may not define you now
    And it may never hold quite true
    But I know these feelings very well
    Do I want to not think of you?




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