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    dots Submission Name: Burried Upon Blooddots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622/961/454
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Misc/Gothic
    Total Views: 1510
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    Bytes: 1251



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    dotsBurried Upon Blooddots
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    Walking the great mile of a cold forsaken planet,
    Alone underneath the stars of this gift brought granit,
    All building up inside, my mind can't think again,
    About what will happen to my destiney within.

    The time is so burdened, these tears are so lustfelt,
    This drama that has never ended, the despair I delt.

    All in all, the time withered my tears, to scars,
    These damn scars! Reminds me when it went to far,
    A lament turned into a weapon upon myself,
    The darkness gifted me with all pain my mind felt.

    The gloom and the hoplessness, brought me to blood,
    The lust and the hated virtue of pain, breaks love,
    Time is useless, and in a common sense I know,
    That only a few more minutes my spirit will go,
    Away from where this longing hope is never,
    Let all come down upon my blood, pain is forever.

    Windows of silent spring,
    The saddist of this damned suffering,
    The angels collars that strangel,
    Of there injustified spirits, on a forsaken willow fell.

    The sun is gone,
    This pain was too long,
    Alas I breathe,
    The blood that this knife grieves...




    Submitted on 2004-07-23 16:26:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow....whoever wrote that last comment is a [censored] moron....so are you....bas tard! what the f uck was that sh it?! it was all dark, and had a flow, and a light rhyme, and was all in all, pretty kick ass...not because it's "Gothic", because it was well writen
    | Posted on 2004-09-04 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooh... very nice. definetly refreshing compared to the other posts on right now. its so sad, but the language was so beautiful. All in all, the time withered my tears, to scars,
    These damn scars! Windows of silent spring,
    The saddist of this damned suffering (such a great rhyme). wow, seriously, it was dark without being hideously corny. thats a gift.
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by all the english boys | [ Reply to This ]


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