Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: The Sleeping Stonedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Joachim
    ASL Info:    75 Male RSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 361/264/178
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 807
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1255



    Description:
       Patience Strong (1907-1990) (born Winifred Emma May) joachim



    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Sleeping Stonedots
    -------------------------------------------


    The Sleeping Stone
    By Patience Strong

    I stopped to call a taxi in the heart of Babylon.
    At the pavementís edge I stood - the traffic writhing on
    Leftward to the Whitehall turning like a lustrous snake
    Or rightward to Westminster Bridge, the southbound road to take,

    There to pass proud Boadicea set towards the tower
    Where Big Ben in his solemn grandeur booms the passing hour
    As if to warn the seething crowds that Time brooks no de!ay
    As he sifts the minutes of the unforgiving day.

    While I across the street looked out towards the Abbey wall -
    Afloat behind a spray of limpid light that seemed to fall
    Veiling the secret features of the Abbeyís ancient face
    That houses Jacobís Bethel stone in its appointed place...
    Where Israelís holy treasure lies for every eye to see:
    Safe in our keeping. This, the very Stone of Destiny.

    The taxi came. Again we plunged into the turgid stream -
    And glancing back, the Abbey seemed remote as in a dream.
    Sculptured in its frozen calm it stood apart, alone,
    Sharing with God the hidden knowledge of the sleeping stone.




    Submitted on 2010-02-28 06:17:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      The stone isn't sleeping . It's alive and seething with residual harmonic vibration and its own kinetic inertia
    | Posted on 2010-02-28 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    183333

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    This written by Chelebel
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Wavelength written by saartha
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Giving written by jjd
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Push written by JanePlane
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Incubus written by monad
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry