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    dots Submission Name: Like a bookdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    Description:
       First poem about Jonathan, yay!


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    dotsLike a bookdots
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    I'm afraid and excited,
    lost but so sure of myself.
    I'm on a new adventure,
    and you're leading me
    To this new country,
    yet we're not leaving this couch.
    You're bringing me to a new world,
    but we won't leave this room.
    Everything I once knew
    doesn't seem to matter,
    the knowledge is false.
    I can look in your eyes,
    and all I can see
    is the hazel and blue.
    When you look in mine,
    you see my fears,
    old pain and old tears.
    You can read me like a book,
    although I stayed closed before
    to so many people.
    But you look to me,
    and the pages start to turn.
    My whole life story
    on display before your eyes.
    Yet, I don't feel the need
    to try to hide from you.
    I open my book for you,
    and let you continue to read
    until your heart is content.
    I let you open me up,
    and read me like a book.




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