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    dots Submission Name: Ghostsdots

    Author: hollowshell
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 39/40/14
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 633
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1001

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    I smile,
    A simmilar paradox, you; the presence of your boyfriend.
    Simmilar ground, tredded oh too often before.
    Sip, look, sip.
    Songs of past feelings play in my head.
    I relax, eyes drift, mind wanders to oblivion.

    You smile,
    Errors of past judgement cloud; he makes a joke, i fane lip movement.
    Ghosts of women past judge me.
    Sip, look, sip.
    Songs die out, outro's ever so evident.
    I panic, hands shake, my glass raises.

    My smile fades,
    The beverage laughs; my discomfort apparent.
    Scars of the past hold weight.
    Sip, look, sip.
    Silence plays heavy; a terrifying tone.
    My lack of choices obvious.

    Your smile fades.
    He stands, demanding time, requesting his trophy.
    I recoil in recollection.
    Sip, look, sip.
    You look, stand, walk, and leave.
    My lack of options obvious.

    My smile drifts...

    Submitted on 2010-02-28 22:38:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey this is a good poem keep the words comings
    | Posted on 2010-03-01 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this misc . its very on the move
    like everything is floating within and then away.
    maybie the recurrent of a dream
    or looping thought

    good write over all -
    excellent comes with time and practices

    fav lines :
    Scars of the past hold weight.

    He stands, demanding time, requesting his trophy.

    beautiful .....keep writing

    | Posted on 2010-03-01 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]

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