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poison and flowers in my hair

Author: all the english boys
ASL Info:    15
Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 173 /239 /46
Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Romance
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poison and flowers in my hair

the poison drips through my arteries
in my right arm, crumpling a love letter
written in purple ink and the words fly off the page
like bullets from a broken gun
sparatically asphyxiating claustrophobic letters
dissolving in my lungs, ink clotting in my veins
i scream out in alteration, my process of adaption only lasts so long
reverie is such an antagonistic bitch
to leave me gasping the gutter
vomit drying in my hair i styled this morning just for you
flowers in it too
but now there is only rushing water into the sewer gates
and deflated breaths coated in false promises

Submitted on 2004-07-23 17:04:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it seemed like the vocabulary got in the way of the flow and the meaning. also i think you mean "grasping the gutter" however, i think that the images are good, it's simply the word choices i have a problem with- i very much like the rest of the poem. "deflated breathes coated in false promises" vomit and flowers in new-styled hair... the end was very good.
| Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]

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