poison and flowers in my hair

Author: all the english boys ASL Info:    15 Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 173 /239 /46 Words: 103

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poison and flowers in my hair

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the poison drips through my arteries in my right arm, crumpling a love letter written in purple ink and the words fly off the page like bullets from a broken gun sparatically asphyxiating claustrophobic letters dissolving in my lungs, ink clotting in my veins i scream out in alteration, my process of adaption only lasts so long reverie is such an antagonistic bitch to leave me gasping the gutter vomit drying in my hair i styled this morning just for you flowers in it too but now there is only rushing water into the sewer gates and deflated breaths coated in false promises

Submitted on 2004-07-23 17:04:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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it seemed like the vocabulary got in the way of the flow and the meaning. also i think you mean "grasping the gutter" however, i think that the images are good, it's simply the word choices i have a problem with- i very much like the rest of the poem. "deflated breathes coated in false promises" vomit and flowers in new-styled hair... the end was very good.

| Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]

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