Propinquity habitation harbinger spectra
Perplexing paradox tenacity rostra
Intensely cogitable abstract mantra
Penumbral exigency , umbrage per contra
Theoretical incursion grandiloquent ne plus ultra
Exogamy of homoplasy sic itur ad astra
Quiescent serendipity surreal anestra
Reading this ... was like a trip through the corridors of an asylum, it was chocking my brain, I felt I copuldn't breathe. I understand where you wanna go with this poem but ... it is not something just anybody could appreciate and in that sense it is lacking and gravely.
This is a really interesting poem, but I feel like it is hard to understand. Is that the point of writing it the way you wrote it? Or maybe from your description, it is supposed to release some sort of tension in the reader. Actually, I found that I identified with you, it did make me feel tenser afterwards. I think this is partly due to places in the poem that are rough to read, for example the first line in the second stanza seemed to have a different meter than the first stanza, and it really threw me off. However, it does take some talent to fit so many ridiculously long words into one poem without repeating yourself or making any sense. Maybe you should try writing impossible tongue twisters.