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    dots Submission Name: Asylumdots
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    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1087/407/116
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 752
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1547



    Description:
       I hope it helps you find release . It just made me madder .


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    dotsAsylumdots
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    Extravagantly exorbitant mentality panacea
    Pretentious eidetic's ubiquity mnemonics
    Extraversion embezzlement extortion mens rea
    Endergonic laconic cacophony phonics

    Preterite rendition enclitic equilibrist motion
    Mystic symbiosis dharma spiritual sky
    Brusque macabre abjections the gist of the potion
    Straight up forever ontology on high

    Obdurately abstruse vituperatively vociferous
    Juxtaposition apparition myriad avarice
    Orotund sonorous diction obliquitous
    Multifariously versatile nefarious nemesis

    Mirador bartizan phantasmagoria aesthetics
    Guidon gyration excursion integration
    Sorcerous alchemizing interstitial endemics
    Chaos charisma objectified tribulation

    Conjuring apothegms clitoral apomixes
    Exude emote surrogate extrapolation
    Astral projection's littoral hypotaxis
    Kinetic supremacy homogeneity gravitation

    Coercible coalescent cohesion dexterities
    Adjunct conjunction conjecture acuity
    Platonic pragmatic prosaic austerities
    Extemporaneous impromptu innuendo fortuity

    Propinquity habitation harbinger spectra
    Perplexing paradox tenacity rostra
    Intensely cogitable abstract mantra
    Penumbral exigency , umbrage per contra
    Theoretical incursion grandiloquent ne plus ultra
    Exogamy of homoplasy sic itur ad astra
    Quiescent serendipity surreal anestra




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      Reading this ... was like a trip through the corridors of an asylum, it was chocking my brain, I felt I copuldn't breathe. I understand where you wanna go with this poem but ... it is not something just anybody could appreciate and in that sense it is lacking and gravely.
    | Posted on 2013-05-04 00:00:00 | by Akiko Hime | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really interesting poem, but I feel like it is hard to understand. Is that the point of writing it the way you wrote it? Or maybe from your description, it is supposed to release some sort of tension in the reader. Actually, I found that I identified with you, it did make me feel tenser afterwards. I think this is partly due to places in the poem that are rough to read, for example the first line in the second stanza seemed to have a different meter than the first stanza, and it really threw me off. However, it does take some talent to fit so many ridiculously long words into one poem without repeating yourself or making any sense. Maybe you should try writing impossible tongue twisters.
    -Katriana
    | Posted on 2010-11-05 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]


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