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    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 360
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1625



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       roughdraft, ill edit. let me know :)


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    My body may be dying slowly,
    But my heart is beating to Heaven
    And the sound that I've found has
    Made the bread leaven
    If I eat enough bread, if I drink enough wine
    If I pray the right words at exactly the right time
    Redemption may be near
    And salvation can be mine
    But the answer to my prayers
    Through prophesy and tales
    That I earned through monetary donation
    All of which failed
    I needed guidance, so I read
    Till my fingers were sore and my eyes bled
    But the answer never came
    The story remained the same

    I asked the priest for guidance but all he did was talk
    The words flew past my ears, like seconds on the clock
    I listened to the words, but they didnít make a sound
    Father, show me the path on which to walk
    And in which direction, up or down?
    Are Heaven and Hell destined North or South?
    Is Love direction bound?
    If my feet wander on an eastern path
    To explore new horizons and questions unasked
    Where the sun would rise from where I stood
    I would watch the sun venture towards what is good
    And follow it to the west, towards its journeyís end
    Only to watch it fall, then begin again
    And the miracles in between
    Seem painted distant, like my dreams
    But itís when I hold you in between the sheets
    That I know thereís a God, and I believe
    When youíre in my arms, and you are mine


    The God of people is not Love
    The God of Love is Divine




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