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    dots Submission Name: Heart Attackdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 400
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 616



    Description:
       This isn't actually a poem about a heart attack, its a poem about a broken heart :)


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    dotsHeart Attackdots
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    I feel the pain
    Itís creeping in
    Itís holding on
    Devastating
    I feel no pulse
    Hard to breathe
    This is what
    Became of me
    Hold my chest
    Nothingís there
    On my last breathe
    I gasp for air

    Where I once had a heart
    Itís empty
    You took from my chest
    You ripped it apart
    Now itís bleeding
    Those razor words you said
    Ripped out my heart
    And left me for dead
    Broken my spirit
    Now I drown in my blood
    You have my heart keep it
    To remind you of my love




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