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    dots Submission Name: Child of Onedots

    Author: Mythica
    ASL Info:    17/female/KY USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 11/31/16
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1091
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 514

       This was in my mind and I had to get it out. It spoke to me and I could no more ignore it, than I could ignore breathing.

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    dotsChild of Onedots

    Rain, my tears
    Fog, my confusion
    Sun, the warmth in my heart
    Snow, my innocence
    Thunder, each heartbeat
    Wind, my very breath
    Sky, my mind
    Leaves and Buds, my hands that reach for the Heavens
    Roots, my feet to keep me steady
    Sand and Soil, my skin to protect my being
    Tornadoes, my rage and anger
    Hurricanes, my fears
    Nature is My Mother, Goddess
    Time My Father, God
    I am their child and live as they will me.

    Submitted on 2010-03-03 14:09:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Lovely images made no less true by the fact I have heard some of them before . In fact I'm sure you'll use some of them again and even again . I have a friend who is Wiccan ( a practicing witch ) , and she subscribes to something quite similar to your god and goddess lines . I enjoy your analogy and metaphor . Great stuff keep it up . Though it may never satisfy I think you'll find it truly satiates .
    | Posted on 2010-03-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting beat. The last part in genius: "Nature is My Mother, Goddess
    Time My Father, God
    I am their child and live as they will me." It types the whole concept together perfectly. I like your comparisons too. Keep writing
    | Posted on 2010-03-03 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]

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