[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Your Heartdots

    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 559
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 341


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsYour Heartdots

    You grieve the loss of love
    Yet stifling your heart.
    Little did you know
    That it was being torn apart.
    This little blood pumper
    From within your chest.
    Is all you have
    So give it your best.
    Never give your heart
    To liars or cheats.
    Cause with you
    It forever beats.

    Submitted on 2010-03-04 11:32:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Such a nice piece. Favourited.
    | Posted on 2010-03-04 00:00:00 | by hollowshell | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    written by Daniel Barlow
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Push written by JanePlane
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Every..... written by jackz
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    AI written by poetotoe
    Summer written by layDsayD




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]