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    dots Submission Name: Your Heartdots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsYour Heartdots
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    You grieve the loss of love
    Yet stifling your heart.
    Little did you know
    That it was being torn apart.
    This little blood pumper
    From within your chest.
    Is all you have
    So give it your best.
    Never give your heart
    To liars or cheats.
    Cause with you
    It forever beats.




    Submitted on 2010-03-04 11:32:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Such a nice piece. Favourited.
    | Posted on 2010-03-04 00:00:00 | by hollowshell | [ Reply to This ]


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