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    dots Submission Name: Alcoholism is only second to love.dots

    Author: colbybradshaw
    ASL Info:    24,deep south, u.s
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 19/19/29
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 567
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       THis isnt supposed to make sense, its supposed to do whatever it makes you do, please dont try and view this as some existential piece that i need feedback on other than hey i liked this or such.

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    dotsAlcoholism is only second to love.dots

    close those overly chewed lips,
    let not the words,
    like acid honey from your bedraggled sense of co-dependency,
    onto my chest , breath slow,
    muffled cries,
    the masque,
    is melting,
    like the wings of Icarus,
    I used a greek similie,
    slap me gods of art,
    what is this but a trifle,
    an imperial outing,
    My mentality begs for new territory,
    i want your minds my people,
    I want you to understand ,
    and I want you to believe,
    Believe the lie,
    Believe that expression is alive and well,
    believe that you are individuals,
    muliticellular masterpieces,
    swirling atoms,
    swirling helix beasts traipsing across an unfamiliar matrix,
    to which our minds give substance,
    i want you to feed like cattle on the vistas displayed,
    I want the dim light of reason to click on in your skulls,
    I want bells to ring in the streets,
    and the murderers of reason to dangle skelatallicly from the sign posts,
    I want ,
    but he is a peasant who reeks of blood,
    and malfeasance,
    The building might stand,
    but he will knock down at least one door,
    Until the hail of bullets answers his arrival like a chorus of winged demons,
    chewing on his spleen like an appetizer,
    giving credence to the nonchalance of the government towards it people.

    A list of demands form a powerless peasant

    Submitted on 2010-03-04 14:04:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    close those overly chewed lips,
    let not the words,
    like acid honey from your bedraggled sense of co-dependency,
    onto my chest, breath slow,
    mufled cries,

    That^ my friend grabbed me for hostage
    Great great poem

    Bah I sound like an idiot with nothing to say -_-
    | Posted on 2010-04-09 00:00:00 | by NicoleDaVinci | [ Reply to This ]
      cloudy mid late
    but up to Icarus or Minos waxy
    over-chewed co dependency (n)
    alcoholism is better with a love for love
    | Posted on 2010-03-05 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]

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