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    dots Submission Name: Karoke Calldots
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    Author: hollowshell
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 39/40/14
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       Ironically, written the night I went to the kareoke.


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    dotsKaroke Calldots
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    I play the Romeo, you play the Juliette.

    We harm, you calm,
    our feelings seem to glare.
    There is no way from here.
    I choose when to stare.
    You switch, I twitch.

    Our feelings live right here.

    It starts with the show.
    Your good points, that I know.
    You smile, I smile.
    Watching as we go,

    I play the Romeo, you play the Juliette.

    I harm, you charm.
    Our feelings one sided.
    There is no way from here.
    Indulgences in a beer.
    You leave, I grieve.

    No feelings to retrieve.

    It starts with the show.
    Your good points, I don't know.
    You smile, I smile.
    Watching as we go.

    The situation rectified.
    My, sing song, justified.

    Kareoke night has come.
    Our song, we shall hum.




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