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    dots Submission Name: Tomorrow Never Comesdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTomorrow Never Comesdots
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    When tomorrow comes the sun will shine
    The bitter cold will forever be gone
    When tomorrow comes this world is mine
    And I've waited for tomorrow so long

    Seems like ages since the sun has set
    I keep thoughts of you so I won't forget
    So when tomorrow comes I'll share them with you
    And when tomorrow comes there'll be much to do

    When tomorrow comes the lonely will pass
    And when that sun finally kisses the sky
    Then tomorrow that very moment should last
    Today went not well but that will all pass
    'Cause when tomorrow comes I'm told it will last

    And the anticipation and anxiety
    All scream out deep inside of me
    Because I know soon that all will be well
    When tomorrow comes to drown out this hell

    And when it finally does you will come thank me
    For not giving up when all was but lost
    The day after today is the day, watch and see
    Could have folded before but at what cost

    And so I wait for tomorrow...
    and I wait for tomorrow...
    While waiting for tomorrow...

    And you know what they say.




    Submitted on 2010-03-05 01:39:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great write! The verse is very smooth and easy to read, although it is a little awkward in the verse with five lines instead of four. The way you talked about tomrrow reminded me a great deal of a book in the Anne of Green Gables (I am not sure if you have read them) There is a girl named Elizabeth in one of the books who dreams of the land of tomorrow, where everything is O.K. and her father comes back to her, and she doesn't have to obey this mean old lady who she has to live with. I think that we sort of all dream of tomorrow, when we think it will be all right. Perhaps we think this because sometimes things seems so hopeless, one just couldn't go on unless one beleived life was going to get better. Its great when you act like things are going to get better, because often when you act like it will, it does. (At least, that is my experience) Thanks for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2010-03-05 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very well written, Blaze. I can sense a lot of emotion in it, whether you meaned to or not. It reminds me of waiting for that love of your life that never comes back. I have been there waiting for him and he never returned. A girl would be so lucky to have a man willing to wait for her.
    | Posted on 2010-03-05 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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