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    dots Submission Name: Heart Breakdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 356
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHeart Breakdots
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    Why is it the heart does not understand
    You were fooled it says
    But still with its own lips
    It refuses to comprehend

    Instead it sits with its little voodoo pricks
    And niggles you with mirthless little reminders of promises

    Taunts and scratches at you
    And then sits back and says,
    “ hey don’t ask me I have no control ”
    “ you did this all on your own ”

    All on your own, it reminds yourself
    And then buries that crunching pang
    Till you feel it in your pulse
    And then it simply, quite literally sits there and aches

    PAH ! do we even need a heart
    Except for the mechanical pumping of blood
    And why should a machine wake you up in the middle of the night
    I was dreaming
    “ Yes ” it says “ but I was dieing ”
    So die then, go on, die
    But no
    The heart just keeps on pumping

    Is it vindictive, do you think
    Does it do it out of some malicious self-appointed punishment
    And as you lay there in the darkness
    You can feel it beating
    LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB DUB,
    In time with your rhythmic breathing
    And at the same time
    You can feel it breaking

    Why
    You were not thinking or dreaming of tears
    Your head was not revolving around the colour of her eyes
    You were not sitting inside some self-appointed torture chamber
    But your heart
    In all its fickle machinations and procrastinations
    Takes you there
    And then plays with the bloody instruments and the chains

    Maybe we should place our head in a vice
    Do you think this would take away the pain
    Maybe we should count the bars on the window
    And dream of sunset

    LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB DUB,

    It beats on interminable
    With its piteous clinging to life
    Keeping you alive only to torment you
    For having allowed it
    To be broken in two

    LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB DUB, LUB …………….




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