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Author: ruejacobs
ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619 /473 /167
Words: 165
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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oh....i'm old? HAH!


copyright by ruejacobs 3/6/10 7:45 pm

What do you want
Oh enigmatic one
Each cord stretched my limbs
Further than intended by nature and
No matter how I tried I couldn’t untie the knots
I accommodated them finally
I thought that if I grew to take the shape you desired of me
I could satisfy you
So calloused and twisted I bent myself to your will
And now like any gardener,
You are dissatisfied with me
What you actually wanted was the process itself
And not the result
How typical and ultimately futile
Self imposed Sisyphus
Ceaselessly toiling and testing his wife
I will cut those cords
For you I will rebel
But not in the way you had expected
Yes, the naked body in the square
But practicing necrophilia, none-the-less
How is that for dutiful
I will heed no man
Obeisance has never been one of my strong suits
Twisted as I am
I can still adapt

Submitted on 2010-03-06 18:56:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really enjoyed this. Especially the calm tone in the beginning, slowly rising to the argument at the end. Good write!
| Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  Very well written. Highly creative and very original. The theme is very good, and I enjoyed reading this.

| Posted on 2010-03-30 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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