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Arsony, Just to roast a marshmellow


Author: silentpoison
ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204 /259 /118
Words: 82
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Arsony, Just to roast a marshmellow



Save me
Before i hit the wall again,
face it all again
Stop me before i misinterpret
this life we live
Sane again,
Along time coming
To loose it all
Yet, What kind of
Crazy would I be
If i understood
A deep breath to relax,
the smokers lungs to a halting
Inhale substance
to retain sustinence
I would burn it all down
just to watch
and be a little warmer




Submitted on 2010-03-08 01:48:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is nice little one here.Lol.It has a disguise in my opinion.It seems like your referring to a relationship of some sort that you want to just burn away, gasolined downed rather than going along with and wound up hurting yourself.I felt thats what it says.The title has its point to draw in.It focuses on you more thsan anything esle though.There are more I's than we's.Which is completely understandable for me because that comes with venting.Which was exactly what you were doing at first here, venting.Nice little right that makes one think of precautions.

RG
| Posted on 2010-09-16 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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