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    dots Submission Name: Arsony, Just to roast a marshmellowdots
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    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsArsony, Just to roast a marshmellowdots
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    Save me
    Before i hit the wall again,
    face it all again
    Stop me before i misinterpret
    this life we live
    Sane again,
    Along time coming
    To loose it all
    Yet, What kind of
    Crazy would I be
    If i understood
    A deep breath to relax,
    the smokers lungs to a halting
    Inhale substance
    to retain sustinence
    I would burn it all down
    just to watch
    and be a little warmer




    Submitted on 2010-03-08 01:48:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is nice little one here.Lol.It has a disguise in my opinion.It seems like your referring to a relationship of some sort that you want to just burn away, gasolined downed rather than going along with and wound up hurting yourself.I felt thats what it says.The title has its point to draw in.It focuses on you more thsan anything esle though.There are more I's than we's.Which is completely understandable for me because that comes with venting.Which was exactly what you were doing at first here, venting.Nice little right that makes one think of precautions.

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    | Posted on 2010-09-16 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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