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    dots Submission Name: Burning X X Xdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsBurning X X Xdots

    I just fell into the backwash
    As you scribbled into my mind
    All this dirty sex breaks out in sweat
    The heat of you so very wet
    Leaves me screaming in this emptiness
    Vacant in the aching touch
    My fingertips undefined

    Feinting within the tenderness
    Falls soft and aching to your breast
    This chill to breathe your heat
    And your body to posses
    Tie you to my agony
    Tie you to my bed
    And die between the arch and between your open legs

    In the darkest curve your shoulder
    Sketched the lines this artist reads
    Draws the colours of a passion
    My heart still longs to feed
    And you haunt me between these cold sheets
    Of my guttural groaning dreams
    As I scavenge for the ecstasy in your eyes

    Every time I see you
    Pale lithe cat stalking naked
    Upon the floor your hands and knees
    You purr and scribble into my mind
    Eats through me in this vampire chill
    And drives me with this animal
    And my teeth and lips are buried in your neck

    I throw my darkest wish around you
    In a cloak of openness
    I hold the very blaze of you
    As to my will every bone of you is stretched
    And I eat you in my hunger
    While I die inside an electrical mirage
    And live with loneliness

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