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    dots Submission Name: The Truth of Youdots
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    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    38/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149/145/91
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 418
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    Description:
       What happens when you forget the damage that words can do to the people you love,.


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    dotsThe Truth of Youdots
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    Hello my love I miss you
    I miss your voice I miss your smile.
    It's been so long since I heard you
    it may still be a little while.

    So many things have happened
    so many things have been said and done.
    Some were so amazing
    they gave me hope that we had won.

    Some were mean and stupid
    things said we can't take back.
    Hurtful, vengeful words were spoken
    causing us pain we see as fact.

    The monster that you have come to see
    caused by words that I've said.
    Is not the truth of who you are
    but what I created in your head.

    The man I see is strong and smart
    and he cares more than he shows.
    He finds me when I'm lost in the dark
    no matter what he knows.

    You are the hero that I call
    not the monster who's on attack.
    I wish I could change for you the relection
    then the truth you could finally see looking back.




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