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    dots Submission Name: Once the One that You Loveddots

    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    38/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149/145/91
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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       Understanding that although you love someone you may not be the best thing for them and they may be better off with you in there life any longer.

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    dotsOnce the One that You Loveddots

    There is no way to fix us
    no way to change what has been done.
    To erase the damage the way we feel
    go back to when we were one.

    I wish a million wishes
    I say a million prayers.
    Wanting to be something good for you
    instead I destroy how much you care,

    I failed you everyday I know
    I constantly let you down.
    You'll never be able to believe the truth
    not as long as I am around.

    I want so badly to see you smile
    I wish to be the cause.
    But to stop and be honest with you now
    my chest hurts ,... I have to pause.

    I haven't helped or healed you
    I've never made you whole.
    Now I can barely make you smile.
    I've been a poison to your soul.

    I know you believe I wanted this
    I wanted to let you down.
    I wanted you to hate life with me
    and to hate yourself when I'm around.

    The truth is I've always loved you
    with everything that I am.
    I wanted you then I want you now
    above everything to be my friend.

    I realize I can't be what you need
    not anything you see as good.
    I want for you to live not bleed
    to be happy like you should.

    So I release you now from all your vows
    from forever and from your love.
    Please be happy be free and dream
    forget this failure if you could.

    You own my heart forever
    even if our time is done.
    And forever I'll be grateful
    I was once the one that you loved.

    Submitted on 2010-03-08 09:49:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is most sad but also very sincere, the fact that in writing that you would understand the damage that is being done there still could be a chance of putting back the peaces. Using the comparison of the poison you used in the poem, the doctors that cue a person like say that has been bitten by a snake or a spider; they use the very poison to cue the person. I may not be saying much but I found it nice and again very sincere.

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