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    dots Submission Name: All inside my mind....dots
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    Author: Mythica
    ASL Info:    17/female/KY USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 11/31/16
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 598
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Don't ask where it came from. I had one of my dreams and it was all I heard through the nightmare. It wouldn't leave me be....


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    dotsAll inside my mind....dots
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    All of it
    The dark and inky black surroundings
    The horrid thoughts and pictures
    Thae faces with a thousand meanings
    All inside my mind

    The Dreams with light and hope
    Are pushed back by something New
    Running down an Icy slope
    All inside my mind

    The more I tell myself it is a dream
    I find that the capacity is reached
    And things burst at the seams
    All inside my mind

    Wandering, looking, fighting, seeing
    I tremble in the cold, but warm from somewhere else
    Shaking, sobbing, breaking, leaving
    All inside my mind

    I think about everything and nothing now
    I tend to notice shadows
    Perhaps I'll put my life on a shelf
    All inside my mind....




    Submitted on 2010-03-08 14:47:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the way this piece is written and can really feel the words good write!!
    | Posted on 2010-03-09 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way this piece is written and can really feel the words good write!!
    | Posted on 2010-03-09 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]


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