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    dots Submission Name: Surrender To Me Your Cries (TBC)dots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 75/186/232
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsSurrender To Me Your Cries (TBC)dots
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    Another day, another afternoon, the darkness soon would unfold the world that shattered like a sparkling star in the dark.
    I could feel his wretched and familiar hands stripping away my life with each clench, deeper into the burn like a cauterizing dagger in the heart.
    Tossing nightmares have manifested before an inclination that I should of even feared.
    Broken kinship in the mind, oh how I can't even imagine that polluted mire twisting at this moment in time.
    Like his idle eyes I black out for a moment.
    Like his whimpering fears I will live again to be tormented.
    Like a thief in the night I surrendered my security.

    Where the punishment becomes apart of the family acknowledgment, sometimes I feel like I'm lying in the middle of the road.
    A bump in my own journey where no one cares to look back at what has been spread across the tarmac.

    Awaken to the click of a clock, the only time it holds is the last call.




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