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    dots Submission Name: A crush to long.dots
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    Author: AkuRoku
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 3/4/5
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       I wrote this today in my forth hour about the girl I like.
    It's funny how were best friends an yet she still don't realize it...


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    dotsA crush to long.dots
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    I sit by everyday watching your passing face.
    So much beauty, so much elegance.
    The burning desire to feel your touch, to hold your hand.
    Everything seems so close but really it's so far away.
    The hole in my chest aches for you.
    It wants to be loved.
    It wants to know it's needed.
    A slowly broken heart growing once more only to be shattered once again.
    Why does love hurt so much?
    Sometimes I just want to give in and call it quits but then I see your smiling face.
    It brings hope.
    Hope that someday you will open your eyes and notice me.
    Still standing here, heart yearning for you.




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