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    dots Submission Name: Badly Written Novel in the Form of a Poemdots
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    Author: colbybradshaw
    ASL Info:    24,deep south, u.s
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 19/19/29
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsBadly Written Novel in the Form of a Poemdots
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    Went to the country,
    it was there that the porch waited,
    like a guillotine,
    a promise,
    my head was measured with calipers,
    the astrolabe was consulted,
    the pilferers,
    the skull evangelist,
    the phrenological obssesion,
    But,
    We are all Gods children,
    for if we were gods adults,
    we wouldnt be free,
    to pass judgement,
    or make foolish decisions,
    it is true,
    only a child would kill itself by its own inaction,
    ad infinitum,
    I ingest the liquid,
    Feel summer flowing in my veins,
    the premonition of the ragnarok heat,
    The deceased winter and its memories,
    falling behind in my memory bank,
    like some vaguely read obituary,
    I press escape,
    I am still here,
    Lips moving,
    forming sentences to enslave the ears,
    to make friends of enemies,
    a diplomat representing,
    a country all his own,

    let my person go.




    Submitted on 2010-03-09 10:46:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hahahaaa I know the story behind this now! And there you are, blazing down your own path by commenting on your own work. You are quite unlike most, monsieur. I am entranced by your words. Share more, please :)
    | Posted on 2010-03-19 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you drank to much and then wrote this my friend. Being that it is woefully short of the mark needed to stress the existential needs and longings of an exiled mind. One would expect that you representing yourself would be capable of discerning the path you should take with your words................... who needs objective criticism?haha
    | Posted on 2010-03-09 00:00:00 | by colbybradshaw | [ Reply to This ]


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