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    dots Submission Name: The Peeping Monsterdots

    Author: Mud
    ASL Info:    18/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 55/98/57
    Words: 359
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Peeping Monsterdots

    There was a monster.

    He looked like a giant lizard, green and rough-skinned.

    He lived underground, but he'd occasionally peep out of a hole at the world above.

    Mostly he saw the underside of cars. Sometimes he saw a big sole with a tick on it slam down.

    Once he saw lots of people in green t-shirts. They put a seed in his peephole and covered it with mud.

    Mostly he walked around underground, eating rocks and drinking lava.

    He sat on both sides of his table and played chess with himself.

    "Here, have a drink, sir!"

    "Thanks, I lava lava, hahaha hahaha."

    "Good one, have another drink!"

    Poor monster.

    One day the monster wanted to look up at the world. So he held up one finger, and stuck out one claw, and carefully

    and neatly dug upside down - a hole in the cieling.


    He watched for hours, and suddenly, between two big buildings, he saw something blue!

    And green! And violet, and indigo and yelloworangered!

    He dug upside down more, and climbed out slowly.

    People screamed and screamed!

    It was a monster, slowly standing up and dusting his scales down!

    He said, "Sssh! Don't worry, i just wanted a better look at that thing in the sky!"


    He smiled, but everyone thought he was going to bite them!

    He got a bit worried, and pointed, and walked over to a building and knocked it down.

    "Look, there! You can see it better now!"


    Everyone shrieked, and sirens began to blare.

    Suddenly, these giant dragonflies buzzed around his shooting fire at him.


    The monster knocked down five hundred more buildings with his tail, and pointed with both his hands.


    The monster felt a pain in his stomach and a pain in his chest.

    Fifteen hundred buildings went down along with the monster

    the day he tried to show everyone

    a rainbow.

    Submitted on 2010-03-09 12:25:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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