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Lies


Author: Bunnie
ASL Info:    17/F
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Words: 139
Class/Type: Poetry /BrokenHeart
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This was written in 2006 not too long after I had broken up with my first girlfriend, with whom I went out with for two years.


Lies



You broke my heart.
With that lie you told.
I'm use to this,
I hope you know.
It's not like it matters
What I feel.
Because this pain,
is way too real.

I blink back tears,
hang my head.
Because I hope
I'll soon be dead.

You hurt me once,
You hurt me twice.
But I hate to say...
It was our love that was a lie.

Bleeding black and burning ash,
Brings back memories
of my once forgotten past.

A past of loneliness,
A past of fear.
A past with you
That brings a tear.

I do not wish you harm;
Nor do I wish you pain.
But I am through
With your tasteless games.

When you speak;
All you tell are lies.
So, don't forget me
when I say:
Goodbye.




Submitted on 2010-03-09 13:50:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Broken friendships are usually always very emotive and quite traumatic. You expressed this very well indeed.

Frank.
| Posted on 2010-03-10 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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